It's alright

I dunno, a type of song like this seems like it should be sung by someone with a more...mature voice. Your guitar playing is good enough for these pieces, but try to get someone with a lower voice to sing these sings, it's kindda distracting... or wait a year or two. The lyrics are decent, they at least tell a story. I did seem like you were looking rhyming words though in places. Nice effort though!