You may be familiar with the Pokemon nuzlocke comics around and I decided to do my own. I'll try to update this 2-3 times a week. I've got the 1st page made so I'll upload it in a few. This is just the cover.
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Here's the 1st page of the comic. Next page will be uploaded most likely tomorrow.
you should...
really...
work on...
layout...
yeah...
No really. You need to work on layout and your story telling.
Also better art wouldn't hurt.
I know that the original comic didn't have great art, but it was kind of a one hit wonder anyway. That guy also had better pacing and layout.
I'm ok with you wanting to tell your nuzlocke challenge story, I have one of my own currently in progress, but you should really do something to try and make yours more, unique. And no, yours being in color from the start isn't being unique.
So anyway. work on your story telling, your paneling, composition, layout and flow as well as push the art up a notch, and it should be on ok read.
good luck, and I hope your challenge didn't end in the misery that mine seems to be heading...
At 2/3/13 11:00 PM, Kinsei01 wrote: you should...
really...
work on...
layout...
yeah...
No really. You need to work on layout and your story telling.
Also better art wouldn't hurt.
I know that the original comic didn't have great art, but it was kind of a one hit wonder anyway. That guy also had better pacing and layout.
I'm ok with you wanting to tell your nuzlocke challenge story, I have one of my own currently in progress, but you should really do something to try and make yours more, unique. And no, yours being in color from the start isn't being unique.
So anyway. work on your story telling, your paneling, composition, layout and flow as well as push the art up a notch, and it should be on ok read.
Thanks for constructive criticism, I'll try everything you said I can improve on. I already got the 2nd page drawn, after that I'll try to do better.
Page 2. Next update will probably be Thursday at the latest, but shooting for wedsnday.
At 2/3/13 11:25 PM, omega88x wrote:
Thanks for constructive criticism, I'll try everything you said I can improve on. I already got the 2nd page drawn, after that I'll try to do better.
I should probably wait for your third to do this, but whatever, no harm in saying this now.
Gonna put it in list format so you don't gotta go through a wall of text.
Point Ein, ja?
Your comic is fugly. No, that's not a jab at your art...well, it sort of is, but even a comic with badly drawn art can look fairly presentable. An important thing to do to make your comic look better is to-
Make the word boxes the right size.
It's fairly obvious that you make the word boxes first and then type in the letters. The right way to do this is to type the words first, then make the box to fit. Also, align to the center instead of to the default left.
It prevents crap like this from happening.
Point Dos, amigo
This is sort of running on the fugly point, and also on the borders point, but let me have my multiple points on the same topic.
Your borders are basically lines. These are the worst sorts of borders imaginable, especially considering that variation of space/panel size can make your comic look pretty cool and interesting.
Hell, let's look at the nuzlocke comic. The guy doing that, as far as I can remember reading, hasn't tried anything far out as far as panel variation goes but look how much better this looks compared to this. Yes, there's color, but the main thing is the solid panel borders. Can you imagine the former example with 1 pixel width line boxes? God, that would look hideous.
The best way to think of it in my opinion is to, instead of thinking of splitting the page into panels, think of the page as a blank background that you put tangrams on.
Tretʹya Tochka, Tovarisch
I strongly suggest putting more time into your linework. Colors mean next to nothing if they're just flat and pasted on cruddy linework.
Ok that was a short point so here's a summary of everything out of order.
Make your panel borders thicker because thin borders are fugly and mess with reading.
Type your dialogue before making the word box for it.
Put more effort into making the lines look good.
I suggest you download a free art program such as Gimp if you're planning to put effort into this. Paint is incredibly limited and it's better to be limited by your ability than by your tools. Is it impossible to make good comics in paint? Well, fuck no, but it'll be a pain in the ass to make a good comic without a layers function at least.
Bonus two panel in case you're a visual learner.
I have nothing to say that is at all relevant.
At 2/4/13 01:22 PM, Felis wrote:At 2/3/13 11:25 PM, omega88x wrote:Make your panel borders thicker because thin borders are fugly and mess with reading.
Type your dialogue before making the word box for it.
Put more effort into making the lines look good.
My computer sucks so i'm afraid to download anything, but I'll try to gimp when I get a new computer. Ok, I made the borders thicker, dialouge boxes is less spacious, and I put more time into the lines. Hopefully it looks better, if not well I'll keep trying. You did help me out on what to do as well, thank you. Also this was saved in GIF so hopefully it looks better than the previous format.
Not gonna lie, I rushed this one. Only had a hour to do this and I kept drawing blanks. But here's page 4
Page 5. Yes, that's a power loader. Couldn't actually get a picture of it when doing this one beacause my internet was down but, hope you like it.
