At 3/27/13 07:33 AM, tinytim12 wrote:
Holy fucking fuck. The turnout for this contest is amazing, both in quality and in quantity. Some of the entries are mind-boggingly fantastic. I bow down to you, 4UR, for coming up with such a amazing topic for this MWC. It certainly helped.
Thank you very much! This contest would have been a failure without all the amazing people who participated. So thank you again everyone who submitted a story!
Here are the reviews, sorry for being so late. The new contest will be posted in the next couple of days.
The Merchant by Jasonpick
The story was really short, and I felt the characters had no depth. Ending was sort of a let down. I liked the intro though, and the rhyme.
Untitled by Lympha
I liked how you switched narratives and the contrast between them. Story starts out nice, and I feel it has potential, but it cuts too short and I couldn't make too much sense out of it. I feel this could be built upon. Overall, it's a good attempt.
Untitled by cryo5
Quite a surreal piece. I liked the language and the heavy use of metaphors.
Possesed by Zag
I call this a "Rhyming Story". I like how it's not actually a poem, but it's not a normal story either. Your rhymes felt well-placed and not forced. It feels written. My only suggestion is the plot could be expanded upon better, feels a bit generic of a story-line.
Cicero by Amaranthus
I really like how this started. You captured the mood and atmosphere very well, and I was just starting to get into the world when it ended. I felt like you never actually told a story though. There was no climax or conflict. Feels like it's incomplete. Character development was nice though.
I'll be home for Christmas by RightWingGamer
I really liked the way you switched narratives, and while I'm not usually an advocate of happy endings, I felt myself really hoping for one throughout the story, and I got goosebumps as it ended.
Untitled by bunivasal
This was a really creative entry! It was actually fun to read. I *really* love that line about the TV's flickering. I think this could be part of like a "Fun/Interactive" genre. Really awesome work!
Poem by theamazingjamez
I've never been a fan of poetry, but I really enjoyed reading this! It made me laugh quite a bit. I think comedy writing is one of the harder genres to write in, so kudos on that! I also like how the poem references itself and the characters break the fourth wall.
Try this one by silas-stingy
This one was really confusing. There were a lot of run-on sentences and I couldn't really make sense of anything. Not sure if it's made to be intentionally confusing or it's just me.
The box by Bryce Dillard
A very riveting story! Had me on the edge of my seat. The narration switching was not jarring, and felt natural. The switch was almost unnoticed. I *really* loved that director scene. I also loved how you humanized the narrator, allowing him to make mistakes. I wanted to read more, and I found the ending to be beautiful. This had a lot of innovative concepts. Please don't stop writing!
Untitled by Black-Deuce
It's short, but it was a nice, metaphorical tale about arrogance/ambition. I feel this could fit into a genre of, well I can't find a word for it, but "Stories with a moral lesson to be learned" works.
The corruption of Hersa by Michkoch
This was too short. It felt more like a description to a story than an actual story.
The Human Specture by greyhawk241
As with many other stories, this was really too short. It felt more like an introduction to a plot than an actual story. It sounds interesting, but you need to build things up more, and elaborate. You presented a conflict, then ended the story. There should be a climax, and an ending.
Reminiscence by silverspecks
It was an enjoyable read. Your characters were likable. I think I must have missed something, because I felt it ended too abruptly. I didn't feel like I took away anything from the story. Like the ending left me unsatisfied, unquenched.
untitled by nietzlawe
Annoyed at first, confused. Loved wordplay. Not sure how to categorize this, loved Tim the sequel. A lot of things didn't make sense but I guess it's part of the ride.
Trip To The Sea by Alsnowman
It was nicely written. I feel this could fit very snugly in the middle of a larger story. Like, it only captures a snapshot. Although showing off the fantasy world and ghouls, and the crashing it onto a sad and morbid reality was a nice touch, almost caused me to cringe.
Search for: Bridgeford by RIGg0rMORtis
Although it should have been quite obvious, it took me a while to realize you were constraining your story to bursts under 140 characters. I love how this can totally be a contest theme of its own. "Tweet a story".
This must have been really fun to write.I got goosebumps towards the end. I really really liked this.
There's a lot that can be said about this, implying who is reading the tweets, how the conspiracy was created, piquing the readers interest with what's happening and not letting it down by revealing it.
Grunge Fiction by TheInnerScience
It was nicely written, and I liked the pacing. The characters felt realistic despite the fictitious tale. But I'm not sure what to take away from the story. Like, you started out the story, presented a conflict, it reached climax.. and that's sort of where it ends. The ending left me hungry, not satisfied.
I do like your character work though. I would have loved to read more about the peacekeepers, these seemingly strange creatures casually acting like humans.
