Meep! No, no action!
Just read your author's notes and... Action is overrated!
What you managed to achieve here... Such a polite evil, childish murderous mischief... While I'm sure what you make would still carry all the wonderful qualities of this here piece... Would excessive action really do it any good?
But, well... Whatever works for you. If you plan animating Lilium's story further (and I do hope you do!), there probably wouldn't be much choice between whether or not to insert an action scene, if it is crucial to her story... Still...
Please, no action for action's sake - anyone can do that, and YOU can do better.
Something like what you've already done... A slow pace, not a word out of place, fear and thought.
((Note: Blame yourself for the torture you had to endure reading that semi-poetic stuff... You got me in the mood... ._.; ))