Eh . . .
"I'm going to do what I call a "compliment sandwhich", where I say something good, and then tell you where you can improve, and then end with something good!" hahaha, just kidding . . .
well . . . in short, the graphics look completely professional, but everything else about this Flash completely lets that down.
I'll start with the positives. the graphics are AWESOME. you very rarely see this kind of style on Newgrounds, and it's very refreshing when you do. sadly, the positives end right about there.
The negatives.
the story: well . . . it was okay. but the biggest problem was the SCRIPTING. the majority of the lines were unbearably cheesy and cliched. I know it's hard to do an action bit these days, but seriously, I'm positive I can take EVERY line from this Flash cartoon and find it on another Flash somewhere else on Newgrounds. it just wasn't working. if you can make your story as unique as your drawing, this would kick serious ass.
the comedy: okay . . . it just wasn't that funny. I know it's hard when your main character is the knucklehead-comedy-guy, but his lines followed the same pattern as everyone else's: it just looks like you're trying way too hard to make him funny. if you cut half the jokes and spent that time to refine the story and your other characters' lines, you'd have a much better Flash.
font: okay seriously . . . did you HAVE to use such a generic font? I seriously see this same font used on EVERY Newgrounds Flash that tries to be all serious, and tries to be another "Broken Saints" or something . . . it's overused. try something else that people won't be like, "hey, I used that font on my last Science project writeup!"
the music: grr . . . don't get me started on this one. MIDI!? please!!! I know you're trying to bring in your original musical works . . . but this is NOT the way to do it. the music sounds like it was made in a highschool music theory class. the quality of the music contrasts so sharply to the quality of the animation, that it just hurts. it's pretty much the equivalent of Jimi Hendrix going on stage with a little Casio toy guitar . . . just doesn't work. you would have been MUCH better off by using tracks off of some movie soundtracks, or better yet, asking a Newgrounds Audio Artist to make something for you.
that's right, I said NEWGROUNDS AUDIO ARTIST. go to the Newgrounds menu bar up top right now, and click on "Audio Portal". bet you didn't know that was there, eh? check out the "Classical" section, and you already have tons of material that you could have used. why does no one know about us Audio Artists!?
anyways, sorry for all the ranting . . . it just pains me to see such great animation be let down by some mediocre scripting and music. you really have what it takes to make some great Newgrounds animations, there are just alot of areas that need work.
well, nice try, nothing personal (I hope), and good luck in the future!
-tedJohnston