Emo?
Gawd. People are so stupid. This is NOT emo. Emo is a depressing, "slit my wrists" type. This is not. IT is however, a good, original flash. I loved it, and if you can't understand the ending, then you can't be past the 5th grade. Good job, hope to see more like this.
Thank you. The stupid ones say it IS emo, and the others say it LOOKS emo (which I can tolorate) But you are correct, its not depressing (: . I think people are not understanding it because they are not watching after the credits. Thank you for the review.
Original
I like it, the animation was smooth and the drawings somehow reminded me of those cartoon drawings in the teen people or seventeen magazine. The speech bubbles were a nice touch and i guess the only thing i can say is make the voices a little bit better, there's something odd about them. And to spacious (and possibly everyone) wait until after "credits" because there's a little bit more "extra" animation.
^^ style
Ahah. Love the little anime-type speech bubbles, but.. Maybe you should just stick to those. The voices were lacking, as I'm sure you've heard enough of by now.. I do like how you tried the b&w look, except there's too much light in your work to get that dramatic mood going. Darkness, a bit of raining would fit in much better. It's a glum film, after all.
The climax was lacking; A clinking sound to signify murder. Hm.
I'm having trouble figuring out what the background shadows were as well - Spirits of the undead? Randomness? Whatever they were, it was cute, heh. Good luck in future endeavours!
It wasnt ment to be dark, hence the lighter colour greys. I dunno D: I'll think about it better next time. The sound was the shovel hitting her and then you see a clue after the credits. Those creatures dont make much sense in this version. Thank you for the review.
To much conflict.
Where to start... The animation was quite stylish and well done. You said about the audio.. But did you consider making this a silent animation? It would better suit the style which was bordering on goth. You can tell that in the scene with the scooter you were trying to add a bit of humour, but it didnt really fit the rest of the animation and spoiled the general feel.
I wouldnt worry about your animation, but you should consider getting a better mic. You should try to improve your storyline aswell.
As a short animation, it dragged on a little and lost the effect most short animations have.
You need to choose wether you want a funny flash, or a serious one.
Theres definate promise in you, you just need to think a little harder before you start.
Silnt might be a good idea, but then I'd have to take out the music. This is boring enough as it is. I needed to decide quickly on everything for class, thats why its so badly done. Thank you for the review.
Meeehhhh
As a quick entry, it's alright, but the voice acting, dialogue, and overall lack of anything meaningful or entertaining happening drag this thing down to the land of ungood. The only upside is the design of the protagonist, which is the one thing that drew me to watching this.