Hmm...
It's actually not too bad to look at, but has some problems.To me, the picture has four main things:
1.) I'll start with the background. It looks fantastic, and the colours all blended in very nicely. Still, if you really used a computer-generated algorithm to make that background as Coop said, then I obviously can't give you that much of a score for the background.
2.) Next we have the red light. It looks a little wierd, contrasting quite a lot with the dark feel of the picture. I'd suggest dark blue or purple-ish, I think it'd fit better. Also, I think the light shone on a bit too much, and it shone in a shape of a triangle, which was weird too.
3.) Now we have the black dot think in the middle. Maybe it was the main attraction of the picture, but what I didn't like was how it stood out. You should be aiming for making it stand out as its the focus point of the art piece, but I think it stood out a bit too much. It doesn't seem to belong to this picture, if you get what I mean. It seemed as if you got a black pin and attatched it to the picture. Try and find a way to give a focus point which blends in well, but has importance anyway.
Also, I don't know where you got the idea of a bullet ship, since I don't really see it as a bullet ship in this picture. It looks more like part of the portal; you know, the end of the tunnel.
4.) Finally, we have the text. Now, as practically all the other reviewers said, the text was rather distracting. I don't think that when you go through a portal in a game or something, you see text coming up saying 'Hyper Warp' or something :P. I think it does look a little unnecessary, maybe you could try and write 'Hyper Warp' very subtly in the background, so only if you look really hard enough will you see the words 'Hyper Warp'.
I've seen better pictures of portals (some artists are able to give the portal an illusion that makes it look like it's sucking you in O.o), but this isn't too bad. Background was great, even though I don't know if you made it or not, but the black oval in the middle should blend in a little more with the picture, the shining red light was a little too big and bright, and the text was too distracting. Don't worry, though, practice makes perfect, and I'm sure I'll never be able to make a picture as good as this. Sorry for the long review, and sorry if I made any grammar mistakes or sentences which don't make sense, since I'm in a hurry right now and didn't have time to reread my review :(.
6/10
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