the anatomy lines are way too harsh compared to the rest of the rendering. The line work and the rendering dont mesh very well. The hair actually works for me, I can tell you put a lot of thought there. I think if you spent as much time as you did on the hair and breast areas as you could have in the original composition / line drawing this would have turned out better. Sorry - just not executed well.

make sure its sexy before you label it sexy. Also, lines do not equal shading the way you used them those "abs" are a joke.

You need many lessons on anatomy. Muscular development. Skeletal structures. Organ placement (I say that for the naval, if you don't get what I mean, see about the umbilical cord). I may not like the style, but that is my thing. I normally don't use if I like something as a factor as to how I will grade, but I did this time.