A swell idea
You bring shine with sparkles of nice view points and ofcourse some alurring elements aswell, the alurring points of view are always nice but its the well designed lines and structure of the character or characters that make this just "JUMO-OUT-AT-YOU" with some nice elements.
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I would ad some more glistering shine on both bodies to show the impact of the moment.
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