too much intro

the intro is too long...the song starts at 0:50

I'll comment on some other things now...

This review might be as long as the last one, it might not be, I have no idea. :P We'll see.

I see you've got VEC! :) Definitely Volume 2, I hear samples from that one, I can't remember if any of those are from Volume 1 or not. So you have more resources to make better songs - all you need to do now is learn how to use them well - which is no easy task, considering there is no "best" way to use a resource. Just give it some time - those awesome ideas will come soon enough, with enough experience.

Another major concern is your mixing - it's becoming an issue now, I see. Don't worry, I had more than a few songs with... less than perfect quality. XD One song of mine's especially famous for it, but... if you're interested, bring it up in a PM sometime. :P The main problem is your kick - I can understand trying to get it to sound bassy, and stand out among the rest of the song. But how about you don't go about it by simply raising the volume next time? ;D Fruity Parametric EQ 2 is a perfect tool for this sort of thing - play around it and you'll see what I mean. Distortion and clipping is the thing you least want when perfecting the mixing of a song - so if you're listening to it, whether on FL Studio or on an .mp3 render, and you hear any distortion/clipping, do whatever it takes to fix it. ;) Tweak with the individual volume knobs, or drag down the master volume - and then amp up the .mp3 render in a program like Audacity. Once you've finished that (and ONLY once you have), you could put a Fruity Parametric EQ 2 on the Master channel, and tweak with that until the song's overall easier on the ears.

I don't know about your synth and drum choice/usage in this song. Some choices are definitely better, some... well, they're weird. Don't go with synths that are TOO erratic, detuned, etc. Same goes for drums. This kind of song does better with cleaner-sounding synths and drums, at least in my opinion. ;) Just a thought here.

That bass is still on the offbeat, see the review for the other song...

You know what would help you a lot? If you listen to music of the genre you're trying to make, by professionals or at least people better than you - and OFTEN - you'll definitely get a lot better, a lot faster, compared to listening to one genre and making another. It worked quite well for me - it's been less than a year since I started and people say I improve fast. :P</ego>

Not a bad song, but I THINK you could do much better. :P Don't get me wrong, though, there's definitely improvement! As always, send me a PM or respond to this review if you have any questions. :) Oh, and I'm still waiting for an original song. ;D Keep it up.