Well...

Ok, you had the basic idea here, but the lead techno sound was very strange, and that bass was way to screechish. That wooossshhhh sound scared me a little, and it had no big lead after it. always have a major change in the song when you put in a woosh noise, or at least add a layer of beat or synth.

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the drums at the beginning are funny. sorry but i didn't like the part after 00:27 ... especially the instrument u choosed (the one which breaks ears :S )

A good base

I enjoy the groove of this song a lot, and I think the bass line is very catchy. I personally don't care for the high-pitched sound at all, though. It is just too shrill and harsh. Maybe take the sound down an octave? That may fix it, or at least make it less penetrating.

Watch the squeal

It kind of squeals in parts, but it doesn't fall into the common trap of dance music of repeating the same thing. Squeal or not, its rather good. Don't worry too much about the bass, it gives a nice roomy sound.