Overall nice job, it has some really nice parts. I think the beginning was a little rough. You might want to start with more standard drum patterns and then start to experiment once you have your listener hooked.

The second half was much better and there were a few sections that really hit a groove. I liked the over all funkyness and olskool vibe you got going on.

Finally I would focus on your mastering a bit and finding the right levels for each sound so everything blends nicely. Some sounds you might 'push' forward or back depending on what sounds good to you. Then you can start panning to push some things off center a bit.

Great job over all I hope you keep making music!