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jeremi (remix)

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my first sort of-ish completed-but-not-really-
completed song ever.


i do have some experience with fl studio 7, but i was never inspired enough to actually complete a song.
this song is probably one of my favorite pieces of work that i've composed.


although some may feel like it's finished, i still feel a sort of "hole" in it.
criticism would be really helpful :].


enjoy!

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Interesting

It's an interesting take on the theme, and loops neatly...
However, I would suggest shifting the instrument change, at 1:02, to around 0:35. And... maybe some more beat-setting percussion... a more prominent tune-setting instrument ( like the one that plays the main tune for the first minute ) .

waitwhatgrimace responds:

you're right.
it probably would sound better shifting around 0:35, seeing as it takes a little too long to pick up and stuff.

and if by adding some "more beat-setting percussion" you're referring to the original instruments in the song, then trust me, i'm already on that. :]

thanks for the review Garbeld.

Good

It somehow didn't exactly touch the spot but it has potential,
maybe try a little bit more variation in that repetitive 5 note (like ya did at 1:02, that was cool), and find a way to put more oomph into the main melody perhaps a instrument to guide it?

Meh, you'll get there :D

****

waitwhatgrimace responds:

i understand exactly what you mean.
i'll try my best.

thanks. :]

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Uploaded
Dec 28, 2007
1:19 AM EST
Genre
Video Game
File Info
Song
1.4 MB
1 min 31 sec

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