I like the warm pads at the beginning. The “oom-pah” rhythm at :08 is cute, as are the “oh!” vocal samples. The texture is a bit minimal here, and could probably use some percussion to give it more of a sense of energy and drive. The composition in general could be a bit more fleshed out, as after the intro the structure seems to be a pretty simple ABABA form. The string instruments don’t sound particularly authentic, either, and the dramatic descending mallet riff at 1:02 sounded a tad out-of-place compared to the rest of the piece. It might’ve been better to turn the entire piece into a loop.

Overall, there are quite a few good isolated ideas here, from the cute sound design to the plucked string melodies, but the piece could use a bit more harmonic depth and variety. I’d encourage you to keep working on it, though. Certainly has potential. Keep at it, JizzyJazz! ^_^

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.5/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.5/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.25/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.5/1
Composite score
6/10