Yes, this is dfinately an improvemtn
Edit: Please mind my horribld spellign
This was an entry into one of the recent music (edit:NGUAC) competitions hosted on NewGrounds.
Sadly, it didn't make the grade and tracks far better than mine won out.
Since I'm not under any pressure any more, I decided to revisit this and finish/polish it up a little.
This is the result.
It's a little bit longer and overall, sounds better in my opinion.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.