I like the foreboding mood at the beginning and the frantic synth line at :11. The mix is a bit muddy, especially at the low end of the frequency spectrum, and the drums are very quiet during the busier sections. You can fix that by adding an equalizer to each instrument in your DAW’s mixer, and then removing the frequencies below 200 Hz for every instrument except the bass and the kick. It might also help add clarity and sharpness to the mix if you put some compression on the drums. There also might be a tad too much reverb in the texture at times. You’ve definitely nailed Dimrain47’s style, though.
The breakdown at :54 was a good idea - certainly helps draw contrast from the more energetic sections of the piece. I also like your transitions throughout this piece, simplistic though they are. The ascending line at 2:00 was a good way of creating variety as well while maintaining the sense of pent-up tension pervading the first half of the piece. There are times when the harmonic framework here could use some more variety, as well as a stronger sense of motion. I’d suggest doing more with filtering and automation to add a sense of ebb and flow over the course of some of the longer, repetitive sections of this piece (like 1:15 to 1:59). The main refrain at 2:53 could also sound a tad more distinct compared to the first one, just to create a sense of overarching development.
Overall, I like the ominous mood, sound design, atmosphere, and rhythmic content here. As for items for improvement, the piece could use some more variety in the texture and a cleaner mix. Keep at it, VoltranixMusic! ^_^
Mixing, mastering, and balance
1/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.75/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.75/1
Composite score
6.75/10
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