It's gonna be interesting to see how the theme works out in the game you're talking about. I like the beginning, although I'd maybe work on the audio leveling, since it seems to be a bit cluttered. I'm a big fan of the chord progression, and the melody in what sounds like the chorus. I don't feel like the drum pattern at 1:17 fits the overall atmosphere the composition goes for, maybe try going for hi-hat's on each eight note instead and see how that works, I think that could sound nicely along with a quieter bass drum and snare. The Melody at 1:26 at least to me doesn't work too nicely especially with the drums. I can see what you were going for, but I do believe there's quite a big mess present. I think that what follows at 1:42 is rather well done and while the overall problems are still present, the piece stays at the rather high note right to the end. i hope that what I wrote you found helpful and that it was a constructive review.