Apocalyptic, MU53
Composition/Structure:9 Production:6 Emotion/Atmosphere:10 Art Relevance:6
Hell yeah, fun melodies and ideas! Had a lot of respect for what you had to say about your work, people forget judges are their peers and we love to know what's up sometimes. Providing data shows a technical knowledge that signals authenticity to the community. I'm always saddened when people have nothing to say about their creations.
I feel compelled to disagree with your statement "this is my first go at something like this." At 16 years old every new song must feel like it's something totally novel but I'm going through your catalogue hearing dance kits, dance rhythms, familiar EDM genres, triplets, clap snares... your building a music language as you go but you're still in the forest of youth. The more you learn about music the more it all ties together. In music there is constant evolution, there's always another instrument to learn, another genre to try out, another rhythm to arrange; eventually the very idea of music means something completely different than when you started. It's an honor to get to hear promising new talent, your arrangement is fun and exciting. The track reminds me of a lot of the stuff that my friends made here a long time ago.
The orchestral elements are well woven, the industrial noises were inspired. The mix kept getting me down but I'm looking at your age and looking at the mix like "it makes sense." With a perfect mix a lot of the weirdest ideas will get a hall pass. That kick drum is the focus in this mix, would have loved to hear some dynamics from it. Creating a difference in velocity between the notes on the pulse and the ghost notes, velocity diversity on your drums can really help out a groove. I've been playing the drums for 20 years, dynamics is one of the few ways a percussion instrument can be emotive. A 32nd note drum crescendo or a decrescendo is a drummers way of saying "I have feelings." The kit samples are good but I want to introduce you to some drum modeling techniques...
I love hearing goofy new snare sounds, contemporary EDM producers will make the strangest tones work. Pitching the snare sample all the way up usually gets a snappy trap/nuero sound. I layer snares and play with their levels/pitch/resonance until they mesh together. I'll usually have three or four snares working together in any song. Eventually I merge all the snare signals to EQ and compress, then the new sound gets sent to a digital mixer (my DAW is Reason). I do the same with my kick drums, two or three work together to make a new sound. From the sequencer you can layer the sounds or use the samples individually to create fake dynamics. (You can also layer synths to get cool new tones.)
Learning how to master automation lanes lets you make interesting changes to everything as the song evolves. Panning data, pitch, volume, BPM, envelopes, almost anything you can automate you should try at least once. Opening up the release on an instrument with an automation lane sustains the sound in a way reverb just can't.
I haven't touched on why relevance got a short score but it may have been because there were visual cues leading to obvious foley choices, why not sample some nuclear bomb stuff? It's literally a cliche beyond a cliche, every one has sampled those old timey duck-and-cover videos but I wouldn't have cared. Gotta be careful nabbing samples but at your age and your situation I don't expect you to buy thousands of stock sounds. I nab video game sound folders from google searches and pitch bend them to feel better about myself and my naughty sampling habit. I'd have dropped some bomb sound samples, tanks rolling around, swords clanging, guys stabbing each other, babies crying, dogs barking... the word I used earlier was "foley," you can build a soundscape with these ideas and transport the listener into the image.
Since the artist used classic paint techniques I'd have orchestrated the fuck out of some sections and tied the ideas together claiming it to be some kind of 19th century romanticism. In truth I just like hearing orchestral sounds in my EDM genres. That intro could have had an entire section of bass drum swells, cymbal swells, French horn brams, chimes, gongs, timpani, waterphones... the art invited so many excuses to use classical techniques but you might not have those ideas available to you yet, AGE STRIKES AGAIN! FOILED BY THE THINGS WE HAVE YET TO EXPERIENCE.
I wish I could sit here all day and share ideas with you because your age is interesting. I do hope you spend some time checking out the other contestants! The winners always have some pretty inspiring stuff, I'm in love with this years batch of virtuosos. Good luck MU53!
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