I like the idea of this one, although I have some issues. I'd definitely bring the volume of the main instrument a bit, because it really sticks out and not in a good way. I'd also maybe gives some more breaks in the melody, maybe repeat some parts once or twice, because the non stop progression gets kind of tiring after a while, although I could see that stop being a problem after re listening to it a couple of times. Overall I'd say it's okay