its a good intro.
This is a great intro. But the song its self wont be an ambient song, you need to make a dance song out of it... again i think an off beat bass line...a well peformed kick section. PM with the song program you used. If you used fl7 i can really help you with the score, then you can chose your own instruments, and make your tweeks etc etc. But i think this is a nice different intro to what we usually hear.