The narration and the music were good, but the story itself is more like reading a description of a story than the story itself... Didn't gave much of impact or emotion actually. I'd love to hear a story with this plot though.
@DaxCamdaxian and Adrian H. - Writers
@Aalasteir - Narrator, music, production
The Insomaniac
A very shy high school boy ventures to go with his schoolmates to an arcade, which ends up being in reality a visit to an abandoned house on the outskirts of the city, it is then that the boy is forced by the rest of his classmates to go down to a basement in which he is locked and abandoned by the rest of his classmates, in the darkness he finds an ancient urn and an exit in the form of a crack in the ceiling, climbing he loses his balance and falls along with the urn to the ground which ends up breaking on top of him releasing a demonic being from inside, The young man knocked out by the fall suddenly wakes up in his house wrapped in the sheets of his bed with no memories after having failed his escape from that basement, his parents upon seeing him receive him with relief and anger because the young man was absent all night and according to the information given by his classmates "he stayed in the arcade playing alone", the young man tried to explain himself without success to what he simply went to the school, it is from this moment that the high school boy begins to have delusions, a permanent feeling of pranoia, anxiety and stress.
At the end of his school day he runs into his classmates who threaten to beat him up
if he reveals anything about his confinement in that basement. Behind his attackers
the shy boy sees a swollen shadow materialize that slowly extends what looks like
long, sharp hands that began to wrap around the necks of the children. Upon seeing this the boy begins to scream and is quickly surrounded by the bullies, who beat him relentlessly until a neighbor sees what’s happening and scares the attackers away. The young man is taken home and during the meal with his family he sees again how out of nowhere some hands appear from the center of the table and try to touch one of the plates with food. The boy takes the knife from the table and stabs it hard into the wooden surface, dissipating the long shadow without realizing that he was about to stab his brother in the hand.
Punished, at night his body feels very cold and full of pain, the anguish leads him to have a panic attack, he gets up to go to the bathroom to rinse his face and in the hallway he sees an image that disturbs him greatly, hanging from the edges an elongated being smiling at him in a sinister way, observing him with white eyes, the impact makes him faint waking up again in his bed like that first time.
Soon after in his city there is news about sightings of a "night torturer" who has attacked different people who describe a smiling elongated man who tried to suffocate them and injured them in different ways.
The boy has hallucinations about this evil being every day, his body gradually begins to change, looking more and more emaciated, his acquaintances, friends and family see him acting in an abnormal way, they think he has gone crazy when this boy only tries to fight against the hallucinations caused by this demon that is inside his mind, one of those times he believed that the demon was facing him and accidentally hit his father in the face, another time he threw the blender from the balcony thinking that he had locked the demon in another urn, every day this spectral being played with the child's mind and he tried to get rid of it.
At night the demon took over the boy's body and went out into the streets to do his own will. The young man didn't know about this at first, but through visions in which he saw himself torturing people he was able to deduce it. So on one occasion he tied himself to his cot at night only to wake up with no memory of the possession and with the bed and room completely destroyed.
The parents began to consider the option of admitting their son to a psychiatric clinic, so the desperate boy, trying to figure out a solution to his dilemma, returned to the abandoned house where a shaman awaited him, who had been following him since his first visit and who was hunting the evil presence. This boy ran away from the shaman who managed to catch up with him to reveal that his intentions were not to destroy the boy but only to free him from the control of the dark entity. So after a ritual he managed to return the young man to normal and sealed the demon in a special urn that he would later hide in the forest where it could never be found again.
The child finally returns free and finds a way to connect with his parents by opening up to them, talking about his fears, his desires and being honest with them and with himself, thus overcoming his shyness, changing his destiny and from that moment on he manages to have a full life, facing fear and the challenges of life both day and night.
Cover art by @DaxCamdaxian
The narration and the music were good, but the story itself is more like reading a description of a story than the story itself... Didn't gave much of impact or emotion actually. I'd love to hear a story with this plot though.
Thank you for your feedback, Remi!
Another great creepypasta, bro!
Thank you so much!
epic narration
Dax and Adrian did a great job! I am super happy to hear you like the creepypasta!
AND THEN SUDDENLY THE MOOSE MAN APPEARS AND SAID:
"im going to shart your pant"
And then I drank water teh ehnd.
Drinking water is really relatable.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.