It wasn't that bad mate.

Make sure to work on your timing. It sounds good. i can imagine someone using this. Good luck and keep up the good work man. Sounds great

Not bad.

I can see how this could be used in a menu or something so its good in that respect but maybe work on layering it more with different new sounds. Keep it up.

Kind regards -
Sirtom93.

meh

wow you a re def. using standard sounds. dont u edit them using filters or patches? Work on your kicks and make the song longer. I find that writing with lyrics helps me with the progression of the sound. Better yet listen to a sound u like and try to emulate in. thats how you'll learn what amkesa complete song/progression so u wont stop on a loop. also please stop with the voice or at least add an effect to it! Where is the bass? Checkout my track called "She has left you" and review, thanks alot.