Like the tone
Nice progressions, love the overall tone and feel to the song. Ends kind of abrupt though and it could use some more depth like a bridge and whatnot, but this is a good start.
I got inspiration on 'composing' this while writing a really bad poem (thing) after watching Smile! MEANING I got all my inspiration for everything from watching Smile!. And now... Here's the 'poem':
Smile
Sending the word that we don't conform to societies worst.
We worry for ourselves at the thought of being forsaken.
Blackening the lights and the debonairs of night.
We are deeply mistaken.
Sending the word that there is no hope.
For we are the aphotics, the hopeless of the world.
And yet we are still mistaken.
They think we don't want felicity, or bliss,
Or other forms of solitude.
So we are complacent.
Feeling the numb scarring of pain.
Society shuns us, for being the useless.
We act as if we are debonaire,
And we give up on the traditional.
Blackening the lights and the flames of night.
For we are rejects, societies Useless.
Giving the word, that there is no hope.
We smile, while giving our hate-filled legacy.
[It probably sucks and is incredibly emo to you all. =D]
Like the tone
Nice progressions, love the overall tone and feel to the song. Ends kind of abrupt though and it could use some more depth like a bridge and whatnot, but this is a good start.
Thanks... I noticed the ending too... I'll try and do better, if I can.
Nice
Sounds Good!
_-dark poem-_
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.