Wrong Genre...
This isn't metal. It is rock. If you consider this metal than I'm sorry, but you don't listen to much real metal. Although, it is more metal than anything Metallica or In Flames has put out in a long time. So I guess it could be worse.
Now as far as the song itself, I like the riffs you used. Very nifty, but alas not metal. I don't like the distortion you used, it is to soft. You need something crunchy and rude. Think about what it would be like to eat glass, and then try to emulate what that would feel like into what the guitar distortion should be. Cause chewing on glass, that is brutal, and brutal is metal! X-D
The drums are slow and flat out boring. If you want metal, there needs to be some blast beats somewhere. Although the beats are nifty for a rock song.
4/5 and 9/10 as a rock song.
But yea, as a metal song I give it 1/5 and 1/10. If you want it to be metal, it has to be heavy and brutal. Nothing really heavy, or brutal in the least about this song.
-Gravey-