VorteX - (AriA)

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VorteX - (AriA)

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Let it play out, it gets better, but some (most?) of the transitions are pretty bad lol =]

Enjoy, and please write some reviews, i wana know what to change and stuff.

Thanks!

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heartless1298

2008-11-23 08:13:53

Bleh...

No offense, but this song also seems to be everywhere, as in you can't really tell what the melody is doing. Everything gets distorted after a while. I don't really know what else to say, this song just needs a shitload of improving. As well, you shouldn't use those really recognizable Sytrus presets. The bass didn't really fit in either. Try making the clap on the 2's and 4's, as in kick, kick and clap, kick, kick and clap.

You need alot of work my friend. Sorry if I've disappointed you.

{DJ-HLS}

RenoakRhythm

2008-11-16 02:39:02

hmmmm

Well, i wasn't a fan of the intro, and the lead synth. It sounds like a clown circus synth. I'm also not a fan of non effective use of the crowd effects.... try a bit more to get them sounding more realistic to how a crowd would react. Since its really difficult i don't add that to my stuff (i did on one song and i don't think I'll ever do it again).

Like you said the transitions were not exactly smooth and flowing - The song did feel like it went all over the place.

I know its alot of criticism and I'm not trying to come down on you hard.

Let me tell you what u did do well:

The mix didn't seem too bad, the kick and percussion wasn't bad.... sometimes the hats were little to predominant, but it wasn't to bad. And the claps were fine. I did like about 1:25 ish for a bit, the synth was cool and the melody written was nice.

I'm not sure where you've come from, and this might be major improvements for you.... just keep it up, and the songs will get better. And i know i made fun of ya on the forum in the thread you made, don't take it personal thousands of people constantly self prmote their stuff.

Keep it up.

Later

I'll be nice and give it a 4 :) fight off those 0 bombers

IndieDance responds:

haha =], a 4 usually translates into a 8/10 =] but sure ill take it.

and ahhh 0 bombers lol =] i dont really care, aslong as i get feedback about my music and people like it.

this is one song i def think im going to take the second melody from and use it again, as u said, i liked it too.

but its k =] and thanks for the review.

mybrobilo

2008-11-16 02:20:00

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nice work in this!!!
u really r improving!!!
got to learn how to master the instruments... the kick was pretty weak in this..=/
the melody is pretty nice

IndieDance responds:

help meeee improve the kick, everyone says that, i have no idea how 2 lol =]

tupertank

2008-11-16 00:02:32

hhmmmm I like it!

I clicked on this 'cause it's the newest added song, and i'm actually gettin' down with this!

great work!

IndieDance responds:

OMG mi first ever 10, THANKS!

im supposedly a new and up coming artist =] lol

but yeh this is just the beginning if you like it =]

i started making music abouttt 1 month ago, and im "young" so i have a long way to go before i become good lol.

thanks a lot though =]

BCPARK

2008-11-16 00:01:30

Nice crowd FX

I like the track, but it sounds like your synth lead is out of tune with your bass. Otherwise a cool track.

IndieDance responds:

really? try w/ headphones? i dunno, it doesnt sound out of tune to me.

but i guess i can see where its coming from, ill try n change that , but its mostly a set up for the second part of the song cuz its higher tune and more up-beat =]