o_o ummm... yeesh.
To be honest, I skipped ahead a bit to see if anything was worth listening to and I caught the chorus. Oh my. ._.
It sounds like the piano line and the vox line are fighting for attention which is *not* good no matter what you're doing. The beauty of the original is that you hardly pay attention to the guitar and it makes great, simple backing, not a prominent out-there feature.