i dont know if im going to leave it as is or not, but this is it thus far
Hm..
Some things sound a bit off. Like at 0:17 and further on in the song. The rhythm for this song is interesting enough, but everything sounds mushed together, and the instruments don't harmonize that well.
Try panning some things to the left and right, and turn the volume down on certain instruments.
Keep at it.
yee, i know what you mean about the 'off' and the mushed-ness... this is actually an improvement of what was, haha... in time i will learn
thanks for the criticism
i dont know how to write music ;) i only have minor percussion theory.. lol
-sts
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