It's ok.
The intro built me up to be disappointed. The actual song part is extremely choppy and the drums are way to loud, particularly the hi-hat. I would suggest making the guitar a little more realistic, if that's the sound you were goin' for. Turn down the volume for the percussion, and perhaps add more subtle instruments in there somewhere for a more classical feel. I appreciate the attempt at Industrial, but it still needs more.
LostDZ 
Cogitogeist 
