I've finally started writing my own stuff!!! Its been nice to have creative control over a song for once, I have to thank Dec though for providing me with a nice lead part (I admit mine sucked). It'd be great to get an opinion on this song and please say if you think there's potential.
Sorry for the abrupt ending by the way!!!
Lyrics:
We stayed out dreaming in the park
My heart upon a helter-skelter
The rain and hail felt so sharp
Pressing hard, we ran for shelter
We watched the future carefully
As it played see-saw with our hopes
your face. it bled so tearfully
That it soaked right through our clothes.
Now I watch you fly away from me
Leaving me grounded on my own
I only wish that you would stay with me
But goodbye is all you know.
I sought your shadow in the dark
Your parts scattered in a shower
But you were on a different path
Beneath the swings I left you flowers
nice guitar
the small solo are awesome man. You have great talent, nice song, nice voice, I like that chord progression you use, simple but very good. You can go far with this even if youre wiling to not change youre music in mainstream junk. keep them coming.
nice work
Very good, i liked the guitar work, take a listen to my latest track, oh and how do you do the "robotic" type reverb on your voice, I wanna do it in my next track.
Hi, thanx for the comment. The robotic voice thing is double-tracking with a little reverb. Just record the same vocals twice on different tracks and then have one slightly echo the other. There are effects you can use for this, but it sounds better that way.
I'll definatly check out your track and comment. \m/
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
toastedavalanche 
