not perfect, but has TONS of potential
This is totally like the next hit pop song. You should seriously seek out a studio, perfect the lovely voice that you have produce a single. Really excellent.
Hello NG,
EBunni's debut piece, still a WIP (needs to be mastered, etc). Hopefully the finished piece will be out sometime in April. Comments welcome, but please, it's EBunni's first piece.
Thanks =]
LYRICS:
Hello.
You got my attention
I keep taking glances at you
Now what is this
My body is tingling
It just doesn't know how to stop
Did you know
My heart melts everytime you gimme that face
[Hook]
(And) o please don't
Don't look my way
You just might catch me
Looking at your
Your pretty brown eyes
And is it just me?
Or did the sky brighten
Cause of your shining smile
[chorus]
(Oh) S is for when my heart sings whenever I see you smiling
M is for your lovely moon-shaped eyes
I~ I love the way your dimples glow
(and) L is la la la
(and ) E is each and every day
I become a sucker for your smile
Could you be
Just another of them
Them who always play games
I wonder
What thoughts go on behind
In that pretty face of yours
Your thoughts
I'm sure there are many thoughts comprised
[hook]
[chorus]
Stitched up
I can't find the courage
to say that I'm interested in you
I can't admit
A simple thing it is
Just waiting
Bottling up my love
[hook]
[chorus]
A sucker for your smile.
not perfect, but has TONS of potential
This is totally like the next hit pop song. You should seriously seek out a studio, perfect the lovely voice that you have produce a single. Really excellent.
I love ya voice
nice voice and ur skills on teh piano are great :D good job :P
well
perhaps it's time for a decent microphone?
and if I may be so bold, I'd try:
a nice beat and bassline with a program like cubase...
maybe a more volume in your voice
a little less staccato piano playing
right now it feels a bit like a sketch for a real song, but not a bad sketch at all ;)
OMG!
Wow... Omg... I don't say that much, but it seemed like the appropriate response for this! The onlu reason I didn't rate it 10 is because I agree with elmepo that your voice was a bit drowned out by the piano, other than that, fantastic! :)
Can I Ask You Something?
Are you playing the piano? multi-talent that's good
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.