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classic ftw

Original feeling...

I have to say the melody felt very unique. The song felt extremely optimistic giving it a very jumpy/hoppy feel that isn't too much too my liking. I am wondering what this song would sound like with drawn out notes with an ambient feel. 1:25-1:30 did feel little too cluttered, but I the part that I liked the most was the crazy feel at 1:54. I think that this song feels like a piece of the story you are trying to tell, the "life is wonderful" feeling at the end of a song. I think you could definitely make it a full story by describing your life when you were in pain and then transitioning to this piece when your life was changing. That's all my opinion though. Music from the heart is something I feel shouldn't be changed if the composer thinks its finished. It's what makes us different, gives us the idea that we all have different ways of expressing ourselves. In the end, nice catchy melody. A little way too cartoony-happy for me (didn't seem too serious as I thought it would be), but I liked the original feel of it. 8.8/10 if you think you can do better, 10/10 if you think its done.

this IS yr best work

you were right in the message you sent me in saying so and i think i might know why, i've noticed in a lot of wrk you seem to add a lot of everything which is kinda cool but i found that at about 1min 20secs the meledy gets rather muddled cause there's soooo much stuff happening. it's strange because for sewer jam the same thing happens and it's pretty sweet too. i don't know i guess i'm not musically inclined enough. thanks for telling me about it though, i thuroughly enjoyed it.

Very Touching.

You did indeed let the work speak for itself, although, it seams that you really put your heart and soul into this piece, you really care about your girl, dont you?

It speaks of how much you care, without being overly imposed. You've made her a promise in this it seams, and its quite a loyal one.

Your chord progressions have a great amount of straightforwardness to them, but at the same time, make the song very enjoyable to listen too. Personally, I'd love to hear a middle voice more to it. It seams as if you've simply gotten yourself chords and a backround drumset, but nothing really making the piano anything important. It gives a base, but seemingly nothing more. My opinion only, but yes, it is very well done, and I enjoy it.

yeah, you're right

It is a great song, better than the other. Very good work ;P
Your song has something very special, that tell us that it's a unique song.

Very nice, continue in that way :)