Not bad for a quick "throw together" song
I just saw the forum post and decided to check this out. I think it would be important to say that I haven't heard the original song, so my opinion may be off point at times. I think if you worked a little bit more on the drums and adding some more variety it could be much more enjoyable. It would probably be cool to hear some cool chords behind the melody also. I think it would be cool to have the chords kick in at 0:24 where the melody restarts, and maybe have a drum fill that leads into it. If that makes any sense to you. I'll check out some of your other stuff and see what else you got goin on.