and you call my drums bad!

no offense but these drums are worse than mine... so i dont get where you was coming from. the guitar melody wasnt too good ( i can tell you dont listen to much rock music) the random fast bits ruined it. and had no chords in the structure. this song would of sounded great with some power chords.

oh the hit has kind of ruined it.

not a bad try though...

youve just started with music so keep going! your not doing bad for a beginner .

oh and dont put rate and review until youve got quite a few fans. ive learned myself it kind of pisses people off and your songs get zero bombed