Here's another 1=D
there is a story to be told
crack a forty n behold
crack a dutchy ready roll
feel it, touch me im ur soul
hold me tight cuz i might go
take me home n close the do(door)
time has come so take it slow
b4 ya know you're getting old
tired sleepy but u gta take me home
I'll b waiting in the cold like a globe
shaking, whats taking you so long?
im all alone? you're on your own
times r timeless so ur arms unfold
down side up n we out inside out
i kno ur secret thats wut im about
dont worry its safe in ya mouth
I'm good? yeah no doubt
help me help you, ur now trapped
n u cant shout no 1 hear u
no1 near you see the rear view
n if life is an object then look
dont reject me u got wut i took
Give it up one last time for the rhyme
like a standing novation incline
CHORUS
upside down hold the crown
It gets closer you are now
upside down king of town
so hello sir please sit down
Wait like patty cake stood in pounds
if i spoke out i would pronounce
jus one last time again n over
back n forth rockin this stroller
step by step we take wuts left
cuz right was done right in theft
happyness stolen while they slept
emptyness holdin on life it kept
... going
slow n no sound never found
But we knew wut we do is bound
To stop but the brakes r on needle
hip hop takes mistakes and makes people
We teach and learn we feed and burn
We reach our turn but think I'll stay
This song needs
another play
on another day
well...
To effectively suit the mood of this beat/lyrics you really need to convey it in your voice, unfortunately I think your vocals dont suit this style with this take. The slow down pitch part is a good addition but I think you had it going for a little too long. Man, I dont know how your coming out with such diverse topics and moods with your music lately, but I gotta give ya props. Keep it up man...
So... when is your next battle track? :P
thanks man, I try and battle track is coming soon as some1 steps up=( i've been tryin 2 battle ppl. Lol I challenged Wyze but havent had the time 2 write a diss 2 em, plus I thought a few other rappers were gna diss me b4 I cud do that, but I guess not=( lol
thanks 4 the review/support man,
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
nice man
keep puttin' out the new hot shit, I do agree with wyze that the beat is REALLY slow but you still spit pretty well, stay up man.
lol, i've been told this idnt hip hop='( oh well, lol
thanks man,
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
Well...
Your flow is improving, but it still needs a LOT of work. This is too slow a track for my style, but whatever. Rhymes seemed mostly 1 syllabic, try to add multies some more, especially at this speed.
Keep improving man
huh? dude this track has the most multies in a single track i've made to date... but thanks 4 the review
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
<3 awesome
so wens that cd gunna come out, the most talented, unique, sexy boyfriend?
lol
I love you. This track is too good
husband/god* ty baby n album coming soon, lol
mwuah<3
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
Broken-Needle 
