Even the tempo up

The start was almost perfect, then you started messing with the tempo and it fell apart for me - it's just a sample piece, which struggles to really represent a tune of any discernible value.

The speed that things move from the really slow and laborious to the ultra-fast is obscene. Messing with tempo should be done subtly and slowly, so that people don't realise what's going on. Yours is far too great an increase or decrease in tempo to cut it.

Basically, what I'd recommend is heading back to the drawing board and getting back to the intro, which worked well and just tweak it slightly, so that the really annoying higher notes of there cut out there sooner, giving you a decent start. Don't ratchet up the tempo and come up wit a decent bass beat as the basics, then move on and develop the melody.

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Too weird for me

This doesn't really work for me. I like how you play around with the speed of the song, but apart from that I don't like it that much. It's just that I can't make out a clear structure or anything that makes this song worth listening to it for me.

I'm not trying to put you down and I hope this review doesn't discourage you, because I really like it when artists experiment around with different ways to create music and I give you credit for that.
But even though I like artists experimenting around I don't have to like the outcome of every experiment.

So, this song doesn't really work for me.

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Cool!

That sounded awesome. Mabey a little too repetetive, but hey, nothing's perfect!