Ehh.

Definitely not a bad track, not by any stretch of the word. But it's repetitive, it's cluttered, there isn't really a steady rhythm and it's overall just, well, unrefined. If you cleaned this track up and built upon it it could become something great; right now, however, it's just above average. But it has potential and I would genuinely like to see it built upon, so keep working on it!

Good basis, but needs to be reworked.

Needs a steadier beat, but the sounds that you used worked pretty well. Needs better bass. Nice rhythm idea though. Clean this up, and I am pretty sure it might get some better scores.