Could be improved.
The kick was too flat. For a song like thin u have to use something with bass on it. If you used the delay bank then nice job, but u need reverb, or a better set of settings because again the song seemed dead. I suggest a compressor if you have one. Also this is only useful if you use FL studio 9. I Can help with the song be adding the things i listed and if you want to u can send me the flp so i can help.