I have to say...

I think Spartacusxerox has it down to the main point.
Just add more bass and make the ending more climatic.

other than that Keep up the good work!

Good parts, bad parts

0:10 Just starting to sound like noise at the moment
0:25 I don't really like the melody, it's a bit too jilted.
0:35 Only now do I realise how it's fitting into the song.
1:00 The melody is quite nice by now, but it doesn't rock my socks.
1:23 Ok, this sounds pretty good.
1:35 This is a pretty good break, and we get to hear the bass.
1:50 This melody sort of overpowers a bit in my opinion.
2:05 But I like this part right here with the synth... changing velocities? I don't have much knowledge about the technical stuff but that sounds good.
2:45 I like hearing the bass
2:55 Maybe this is a bit slow, the bass isn't loud enough I think. It could blow our minds!
3:15 End isn't very climactic in my opinion, but sufficient.

I'm a hard rater, and I give this a 5 out of 10. It's quite nice and all, I like some of the sounds produced, especially in the quieter portions, where it's mostly just bass, and you could turn the bass up a bit. Overall I enjoyed it, but not one to sing home about. Thanks for letting me listen