Needs more development

The concept itself isn't bad, but theres little to no variation within the piece.
Given its a loop, theres still pretty much no rhythmic or dynamic variation at all.

Also for a bit of it, the violins sounded like they were fighting eachother for the melody rather than harmonising together. Ofcorse this may have been your intention.

Lastly, it loops around alright, but not great. Theres still a bit of a jolt on the repeat.