Well, this is my first classical/action type of song. I worked very hard on this piece and hope you all enjoy.
EDIT: 10/07/2011 - Made a few minor changes to the song, like smoothing out the transitions. Nothing much.
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This piece has a lot going for it. There are a lot of accidentals than have been slipped in. I don't know if its on purpose, but it really causes the listener to cringe and get a little disoriented. I'm not sure if this was the intention or not.
If not, I'd just recommend you go through and make sure those sour notes are sticking to the key you're writing in.
Yeah, I do have a little editing to do. As well as trying to work on the audio skipping problem stated below.
Overall, a good piece.
I do like the diversity of the piece. I will mention that, for some reason, the vocals seemed choppy to me, ie there seem to be gaps or skips between phrases(at 2:36, and 2:53, for example.) I don't know if it's just my computer or what. Also, I will mention that at 2:30, the beginning of the vocals, there is a sudden decrescendo in volume. If that was intentional, that's fine, and I'm NOT trying to nitpick your piece, but I do feel that it takes away from the fluidity found later on in the piece. Quite frankly, for your first classical composition, it is good. With a bit more refinement, this could easily become one of my favorites.
The Vocals are a tad choppy I do agree, I'll see if I can fix that. Thanks for the review.
Great, but a bit scattered.
I definitely can tell how much effort you put into it, overall it's very high quality. What I would point out is that you have a lot of diverse elements going on ... and I don't feel like you do a great job of making them sound like they belong together. The epic solo vocal is a perfect example ... there's a section in there where, imo, the feel of the vocal line and the underlying music are very different (1:06 until about 1:45, when the strings come in and help bring the gap between the two). It's kind of jarring. Now, if that's what you're trying to do, create a high contrast, well then carry on. :) But the same category of thing shows up in other ways, like 3:23 where we're trucking along in one way and the just sort of cross-fade and we're heading in a different direction. The variety and multiple ideas is great, just think you could tie them into each other more consistently (the transition @ 5:00 is great, for example). The quality bar for this song is already quite high ... just trying to give a pointer for what you might do to top it. :) Great jarb!
Thank you for the review! Yeah some of the transitions are a bit odd I do admit. However, this is my first classical song so I think it is quite a fair start into the genre. Thanks for the review!
slow starter...
but a very excellent woven together song... the only flaw that i would say this piece has is the beginning... i was about to skip it.. to much of a buld up (sorry, i hate build up's) but then that voice came on and i was like what???? o this is nice.. i listin to it all the way out - i did't like how at 3:28 it seem'd to switch up on me again.. but from what came outta the switch was still pretty kewl and epic.. keep up the good work...
Thank you for the review. I guess I can understand where you are coming from with the slow beginning. I switched it up often to keep the beat new and fresh. Thank you for the good review and glad you enjoyed it!
very good sound!
The vocals give it a nice touch! nice nice
Thank you very much! Yes, I think they do as well. Like I said I worked really hard on this one, nearly a month before it was finished. So I appreciate all the support! Thanks for the review!
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