Hey! I promised you that I'd review you some time ago. I finally found the time to do it. It's going to be a bit short compared to my other reviews but I'll be honest and to the point, I promise :3.
First off, it sounds like you don't have a massive amount of experience making music. The flow of this song feels very pattern-based. You've got the piano pattern in the background repeating constantly and the song clearly following a four-bar structure with not many fluctuations in dynamics. The mixing isn't very good, and the instruments you used are pretty low-quality.
Putting all that aside, this is actually not bad at all. I think you have a LOT of potential. You may lack in technicalities but you were quite creative with the composition even if the melody isn't mind-blowing in complexity. The strings' melodies were impressive, especially around 1:30 onwards. You seem to have a good grasp on composition. There are some things that the track lacks which you'll be able to work on with experience and time, such as the mixing and low-quality instruments, but here are some issues I think you should start working on from now:
1.) The composition is too simple. I know that simple can be elegant sometimes but in this case it left me feeling not fully satisfied. Throw some more instruments into the mix. Some bassy background strings playing chords will work wonderfully to fill up the emptiness that this track has. Perhaps some percussion will work too, who knows?
2.) The track feels too linear and pattern-based as I mentioned. The piano melody, for example, is repeated far too many times and needs to be changed more. More importantly than that, add dynamics. I can't stress how important this is. Put in subtle rises in power/intensity, soft parts, louder parts, parts where the tempo slows down, etc... In this genre, dynamics make all the difference.
3.) Subtleties and details were lacking over here. When I turn the volume of a track up, I want to hear stuff I didn't hear in a previous listen. Add some subtle sounds here and there like wind chimes, soft percussion, etc... Even the little things count - for example, the string notes at 1:30 and 1:59 could really do with fading out instead of just cutting off. The choirs keep on playing at the same volume and sometimes playing for a long time without stopping (your singers don't have infinite breath). It's important to pay attention to small intricacies like this.
Anyway, that's all the advice I'm giving you. Overall, I think you have tonnes of potential. I enjoyed this little piece of music even if it is lacking in certain aspects. If you keep at it I know you'll become a fantastic composer, and I'm not saying that just to encourage you. With more experience and better VSTs in your hands, I honestly predict some really great tracks from you. Hope I helped, and good luck with your future submissions!
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FuzzyOzzy 
