Not bad at all.
I can identify a beat, or maybe it's morphing between different timings underneath the track. I can appreciate the complexity in the track itself. The backing FX (the airy clanging) does work nicely.

What kind of grinds my gears in this is the bass-note which first appears around 0:20 and then repeats itself every 14-15 seconds or so. It sounds too intense for the track in all honesty. If it was quieter, it would sound better (in my opinion at least).

Overall, a pretty kewl experiment :)