Too much sliding between the notes towards the mid-end, in my opinion. Made you go off-pitch quite a bit. I understand how you might be trying to add a bit of your own flavor to it, but the...I guess "emotional" voice kinda-sorta makes it seem like a try-hard effort. I'm not a fan of it. It also seems like this had more voice emphasis way more than guitar. Not sure if there was someone playing it behind/to the side of you, but I would give it a bit more presence. Overall, I like the song, though! This is just my opinion, it may or may not matter to you, it doesn't have to.

Pretty nice

Fucking ace bro!