I like this loop and I think would be pretty cool in a battle scene in a game.
One problem though is that the lead instruments are pretty low and the percussion and noise overpower them.
I would also have added some dynamic in the track like making some notes louder than others to get that action and tension feeling.
I would recommend that you listen to some other battle loops and try to learn from them.

Overall I think this is a nice battle loop and I would love to see it being used in a game :).
4 stars from me.