Good idea here. The mix down and mastering wasn't quite there, but that takes time to learn. The drums were good, but quiet. I thought the vocal samples were a little bit too quiet. The lead was overpowered, but it was a good cheery melody. The the bass line was a little weird, but I saw what couldve been a really cool bass. Again, the mixing was off, the bass had some mids and not enough bass. You did say it was quick, so i'll give you that. Overall, If you took more time to compose it, I think it would be quite popular.

Interesting idea... To bad I don't read so I probably wont get the references. It's hard for me to get critical with this since it's such an weird idea in general xD. The ambiance that the dialogue is great for the atmosphere. I was really surprised when that first melody came in. I really liked how it fit in there. Actually, listening to this a couple times, I see sort of a structure. The main dialogue parts make up the verse, and the melodic parts are like the chorus. Anyway, this is actually really great. Just everything comes together well, and the melodic sections are just extremely well made. Sounds like something I'd here in a more abstract 2D platformer. Reminds me of Thomas was Alone specifically. Keep it up!