It starts out really good, but right around the :14 mark, the sounds start to clash, along with the pitch being a little high. Bring down the pitch a little, and iron out the clashing noises to be a bit less confusing for the listener, and this could be decent.

ung....i have to say......well im not the best but in my opinion the "pitch" of the song is quite high and hurts my ears (its not a joke, it hurts) and probably you "fail" in the background ( i mean..the drums or something like that) but hey if you do chiptune, be sure to get that pitch down a little ok?