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Why fight? So trite
Might don't make right
Think straight and relate
There's no time to waste

The sun will only set once today
But we're in this for the long haul
Orange flames can help us on our way
Until the sky bears it's bleached asshole

If you want more than Fruit Loops or Kix
Try a big bowl of Cocoa Pebbles
Dogs will bathe you with their tasty licks
Since you chose your breakfast so well

A new hair do could be what you need
Like the marble spiral staircase
Where tiny people with tinier feet
Will rent out all of your head space

"How much money can a human make
after converting mini-money
into the dollars that make sense to me?"
Four times more than your wildest dreams

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larrynachos

2015-02-23 18:53:28

Lyrics are alright. Quality is pretty rubbish, but it's not that cringe-worthy.

The music is great. Really feeling the melody, but the drums are too compressed.

JandreParis

2015-02-20 13:31:21

Barring the vocals (I'll get to those in a bit), the song is quite alright.

It's certainly got that 8-bit feel to it, which I like. I think some variation is what you need here so that it doesn't get too boring after a while. The same thing looping after a while makes listeners lose interest if there isn't any forward progression. Switch up the melody and harmony at some points, do some different drum beats - those kinds of things, you know?

Mix-wise... s'okay. Everything sounds a bit muddy, though there is separation of a sort. Sacrificed some clarity for that 8-bittyness, but I'm sure you could have best of both.

Now.. vocals. Those vocals. Usually vocals should be out on front, but it should be just sitting right on top of the mix. These vocals should be turned down. A lot. Not to mention that it sounds like they're clipping, which means that the vocalist might be too close to the mic or the gain should have been turned down prior to recording. Which means quality takes a huge hit here.

Not bad, just some clean-up needed.

-J.P.

NattyMeals responds:

Everything except for the mix (which is something I still struggle with) was intentional. The lack of 'progression' (because there is no real progression in life, just a substitution of one kind of work for another) and the clipping vocals are all meant to add intensity and a listening experience that doesn't go down smoothly. The repetition and the hook are meant to counterbalance the rough edges ideally, which could have been fixed with better mixing. I am not much of a gamer anymore and any 8-bit type of sound was unintentional, so maybe if you were judging this from the perspective of an indie song (as many indie songs are lower quality roughshod recordings) instead of gamelan maybe you would have been less critical.