Well heres another of my hip-hop beats, may i say it is better than any of my other songs.
The effort is there.
It just seems like you need some tools to work with because it sounds like it was meant more for the BGM of Wolfenstien rather than anything new. You have an honest beat and rhythm going on, but the sounds that you are using dosen't give it justice. Keep it up, but look around for other software that you can use to really improve your sound.
Well i got a new music program, maybe that will help.
Dude
We need to find you a Manual. I can say I listend to your other songs but you just aint that good. ut hey I went threw this phrase to. Your still on your learning stage. It just had to much fuzzy sounds in it on my speakers. My speakers don't suck either. But hey keep your head up cause I see you have rythmn in your mind.
Para-Noid
Thanks but all im using is midi sounds tahts why the quality sucks. And i dont know how to make bass.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
joshuaskillsrobles 
