Basic over view of this piece:
Vocals: Great
Music Itself: Decent, definitely catchy in come spots.
Intro: Way too quiet, quite bland as well
Build Up: Lacks something, can't tell what specifically
Chorus: Same as Build Up
Vocals + Music: Not trying to be mean, but the only spot where it fits even remotely is the chorus. Even then, the vocals are slightly off-beat. Just the way that the entire piece is structured with the vocals doesn't sound right at all, most notably the Build-up, but also the verses. Do work on that, as I find that this piece could have has so much more.

- SlashDaUmbreon (Shadowscape)
Founder of RisingDawn Sounds