I like the relaxed vibe at the beginning. Has a really organic tone and a generally smooth flow. You seem to stumble over some of the more rhythmically dense riffs sometimes, like at :22. The vocals were pretty good, but could've been mixed in a bit better. I'd suggest some compression and reverb if that was an option in whatever DAW you're using. From what I can discern, the lyrics are pretty cool. The piece is a bit long and rambling after a while. I think it would've helped if there was a little more variety in the energy level throughout the piece, although the more frantic riff at 3:20 was a start. Overall fun piece. Keep at it, TheTechnoBabble!